Everything in this ghazal is on its way up and out. Smoke off something burning. A flame coming off a grave at dawn. A cry that climbs until the whole sky joins in. A man got up off a doorstep. A man leaving a street the way people leave the world. Mir found one word that covers all of it and then ended every couplet with it.
Uthna means to rise. It is what smoke does, and what you do when you stand up, and what happens to something when somebody lifts it. It is also what Urdu reaches for instead of saying died: a person does not die, they get up from the world and go. So a poem about smoke turns out to be a poem about leaving, and neither reading ever quite cancels the other out.
The first two couplets are a small investigation, and the findings are terrible. Where is this smoke coming from, the heart or the life? Then, looking upward: whose grave is this, sky, that sends up a flame every single morning? He is standing in front of the evidence of something that has burned, working out whose it was, and the answer is arriving slowly enough for him to keep asking.
The gentlest thing in it is a warning. Never leave the house of the heart, he says. Does anybody get up and walk out of a dwelling like that? It is said the way you would talk somebody out of storming off in a temper, which is an extraordinarily ordinary register for a poem this bleak, and Mir does it without the poem so much as flinching.
Then he signs off by calling himself weak to his own face. Love is a heavy stone, Mir, and when did a feeble thing like you ever manage to lift it? That is the last use of the word and the flattest one, a man conceding he was never strong enough for the thing that has been burning all night. Jagjit Singh's is an early live recording, with very little ornament on it and the couplets given room.
How it rhymes
Every second line closes on the same word — سے اٹھتا ہے
, se uthta hai. That repetition is the radif.
The rhyme falling just before it is the qafiya: The -aan ending before the refrain: jaan, kahan, yaan, makaan, aasmaan, vaan, aashiyaan, aastaan, jahaan, na-tavaan.
Hearing the two land together at the close of every sher is most of what makes this form sound the
way it does.